Talk:Walker Imperial Ranger

2008-05-09T04:17:08Z

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==Comments ==
Actually, I was on vacation over the weekend and it turned out to be rather more active than I was expecting so my plan to work on the story went awry. Some friends and I went out to the mountains in a convoy of two cars, and one of the cars broke down spectacularly just short of our destination. Couldn't fit everyone into just one car. :) [[User:Bryan|Bryan]] 19:37, 1 April 2008 (EDT)

Ah, okay. Understood. Murphy's Law... Something similar once happened with my dad, his friends, and a canoe trip, but he never wanted to talk about it. Hey, I'm curious - when, if ever, are you and/or Jon going to upload that Spirit Path story? I found it again while perusing the Archive, and lost an afternoon rereading it. --[[User:Joysweeper|Joysweeper]] 21:31, 1 April 2008 (EDT)

:I'm very reluctant to upload any story so directly self-referential. So there's a bunch of stuff that'll never show up on Shifti, including my TBP stories. Glad you liked the story, though. --[[User:JonBuck|Buck]] 22:58, 1 April 2008 (EDT)

:Huh. Alright. I'd been wondering since I saw "Against Type". Good to know. --[[User:Joysweeper|Joysweeper]] 13:27, 2 April 2008 (EDT)

Finally making some progress on the story. May be a couple of hours before I upload it yet, just thought you might like to know there'll be something available in the morning. I was amazed to see that almost a month has passed since I last added to this, RL has been quite disruptive (and I've been quite undisciplined, too). [[User:Bryan|Bryan]] 00:36, 3 April 2008 (EDT)

I'm actually looking forwards to seeing what the mind of an AT-AT would be like.

Alex Warlorn 2008 04 04 3 44 AM PST

:Hey, you're not supposed to be reading yet! :) (next up is a bit of writing about Steph, but there'll be Garrett content in that section too so hopefully that'll satisfy :)[[User:Bryan|Bryan]] 11:55, 4 April 2008 (EDT)

:What Bryan said! And seriously, get an account here and post your stuff already. You won't get spammed. Seeing a chain of numbers instead of a username on the "Recent Changes" page is annoying.
Garrett's TF was everything I could have hoped for, more or less. Going to have to play around with my section. --[[User:Joysweeper|Joysweeper]] 15:24, 4 April 2008 (EDT)

After I've completed some of my current projects perhaps I shall. (give me a few weeks). And thanks Bryan, as anyone will tell you, I'm addicted to mental change TF. My only regret is that Steph didn't have time to come with a back story for his character.
Alex Warlorn 2008 04 04 12:28 PM PST

==Planning ==

:Hope it was worth the wait. I'll try to do some stuff with Steph today, he'll provide a good outside view on what happened to Garrett. Assuming he's paying any attention to it himself. :) What was the "less" part of "more or less"? I'm open to editing suggestions, especially at this stage in the story's development where everything's still so messy. [[User:Bryan|Bryan]] 16:43, 4 April 2008 (EDT)
::Oh, that should be fun. :D The "less" is minor and came to mind after I'd flossed - I could feel my heart beating, really strongly, in the right side of my throat and in my gums. It faded away very slowly, and nerd that I am I was reminded of something in a comic - "You can't feel yourself breathe. You can't feel your heartbeat. And you can't recognize the man in the mirror" - and instantly thought "Story!" and filed it away. This happens a lot, actually... Anyway, it's probably covered better by the part about breathing. Maybe I should make a page just to compile all my idea-scraps on. --[[User:Joysweeper|Joysweeper]] 17:31, 4 April 2008 (EDT)

:::I added a bit about heartbeat to the scene, I think it fit in okay. I've also established Steph's form, the pieces are coming into place for the characters to cross paths. Any ideas on how you'd like to do that? I'm thinking that once the big mob rush is past Steph will tentatively venture out to find Garrett lying in the rubble, and when Garrett wakes up he'll find himself unable to get back to his feet. Steph will need to find some help to rescue him and get him outside. A substantial amount of time can pass here if need be, though - hours even. [[User:Bryan|Bryan]] 21:47, 10 April 2008 (EDT)

:::Hmm. I don't think more than an hour passes between the Event and the scout troopers heading out - and it would be easier for Steph to get out and start the highway scene earlier on, when it's less likely that law enforcement is trying to keep everyone contained. I'd really like to play Garrett off Anj - he's more Imperial than he realizes - and the squad trapped inside by an enemy could easily be Tampa Bay. I think we've got different plans in mind. Here's this; I'll lay out the timeline as I understand it, and you tell me how yours differs. Not all of this is shown or referenced.

Anj and SL-1984 arrive, have the "function" or donation drive with Tampa Bay Squad. It ends, and everyone wanders off in a loose group. Overheating, Anj splits off from the group and gets a good distance away. Garrett and Steph, surrounded by curious fans, encounter SL-1984, then get a short distance from him and the other fans. The Event takes place; I originally felt that SL-1984 was alone at that moment, but that really was a character piece, mostly for the sake of establishing his personality. The Kool-Aid Man, jumping, gets Garrett to tip over and forcibly reintroduces SL-1984 and Steph; he then encounters Anj. Anj eventually gets to a bathroom and spends some time there, then gets out, makes his way outside, and meets up with more fans. They're listening in on radio chatter and find out that at some point Garrett got out, grew, and started down a highway. Sixteen people including Anj are sent to intercept while the rest of the group finds a new problem, and that's as much as I can assume. Things are happening pretty quickly.
What's your take? --[[User:Joysweeper|Joysweeper]] 23:03, 10 April 2008 (EDT)

:Sounds good. I'd been thinking we could leave Garrett lying on the floor for as long as we needed to have other things go on, but if we don't have other things that need to go on I'll get him on his feet in short order.
:I'm not entirely sure how to do it just yet, but tonight I ''shall'' write and the answers ''shall'' come. Pulleys and levers might be involved. :) I figure Steph will be the one who arranges it since as a telepath he'll be able to communicate with everyone involved. I'll then give Garrett a fright and set him moving, and Steph will get left behind to explain what's going on and hitch a lift with the scout troopers.
:If you'd like less SL-1984 involvement immediately post-TF I can arrange that easily enough by having one of the troopers snatch Steph away to safety instead of him. [[User:Bryan|Bryan]] 23:53, 16 April 2008 (EDT)

::No, it's good. The little section I wrote could easily be cut; basically all that happens is that SL-1984 runs off, and the other trooper do likewise, though for a different reason. Steph could cut in before Price gives the order and get their help, or he could go out after they leave and get someone else. I've been thinking of Trekkies a lot recently - if nothing else, they're worth a mention in the epilogue. Have to get fuel from somewhere.
::I'd really like it if Anj doesn't find out that Garrett's "alive" until he gets into the cockpit - he might get ''told'' that, but it doesn't really sink in. It would be easy enough for Steph to show up and hitch a ride after Anj's group takes off, I think. --[[User:Joysweeper|Joysweeper]] 14:38, 17 April 2008 (EDT)

==More comments==

Great. Now you got me thinking about the transition and transformation of the R-2 now, assuming it wasn't someone's toy before. Mental change is always sweetest when it's from something human into a way of reason that isn't human.
Alex Warlorn -- 4:39 PM PST April 2008 13th

I'm just cameoing [http://starwars.wikia.com/wiki/R2-KT R2KT.] Don't look for your mental stuff in every corner. --[[User:Joysweeper|Joysweeper]] 21:30, 13 April 2008 (EDT)

"Now they pounded past, not as heavy as the big creature or even the stormtroopers but very quick. He could hear a girl spouting a steady stream of "OW OW OW get OFF AHH OW" sprinkled with invective, and as she raced past Steph saw a pair of towering stockinged legs pumping. Something smaller and greenish clung to one of them, but they were both gone before he could get a better look."

Yes they are. But care to fill me on who the cameo is this time?
--- Alex Warlorn, 2008 05 8th

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