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JonBuck: /* {{Separator|f|Chapter 9: Fallen Enclave}} */

2007-09-27T07:08:17Z

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	Marl, Zane, and the other mages left to go heal the wereraven's master and his colleagues, leaving the rest of us standing near the blackened ruins of a stable. The weather had turned overcast and gloomy, the air smelled moist and thick with incipient rain. Tulare leaned against a blackened post. "Times like this I feel rather useless, since my magic has a mostly inward focus on the mind, rather than worldly effects."		Marl, Zane, and the other mages left to go heal the wereraven's master and his colleagues, leaving the rest of us standing near the blackened ruins of a stable. The weather had turned overcast and gloomy, the air smelled moist and thick with incipient rain. Tulare leaned against a blackened post. "Times like this I feel rather useless, since my magic has a mostly inward focus on the mind, rather than worldly effects."

	''Then may I ask why you're along on this mission?'' I ~~asked~~.		''Then may I ask why you're along on this mission?'' I thought.

	"The plan involves some distance spellcasting that must be coordinated. Since I can even make myself understood by those who lack mindspeech, even over long distances, I'll be the one closest to our quarry and will tell the rest when they can cast their interference spell. If all goes right then the mages should get their just punishment." Tulare unbuckled the girth of my saddle and placed it on an unburned log fence. "How are you doing?"		"The plan involves some distance spellcasting that must be coordinated. Since I can even make myself understood by those who lack mindspeech, even over long distances, I'll be the one closest to our quarry and will tell the rest when they can cast their interference spell. If all goes right then the mages should get their just punishment." Tulare unbuckled the girth of my saddle and placed it on an unburned log fence. "How are you doing?"
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	"What about Hugh?" Tulare asked, looking at Marl and the donkey-mage.		"What about Hugh?" Tulare asked, looking at Marl and the donkey-mage.

	"I'm afraid they did a much more ~~through~~ job on him, as well as the other two. Their minds are in pieces, and we don't have the time nor the ability to help them."		"I'm afraid they did a much more thorough job on him, as well as the other two. Their minds are in pieces, and we don't have the time nor the ability to help them."

	Hugh playfully headbutted Marl and sent him tumbling to the ground. Marl's scent was sorrow mixed with relief. A curious combination. "He recognizes me!" the lad said, smiling. "I think we should bring them along on the mission..."		Hugh playfully headbutted Marl and sent him tumbling to the ground. Marl's scent was sorrow mixed with relief. A curious combination. "He still recognizes me!" the lad said, smiling. "I think we should bring them along on the mission..."

	One of the mostly-human mages tiredly looked up and shook his head. He wore one of our travel cloaks to cover his nakedness. "No need, my boy," he said in a voice that was a near-bray. "Now that your friends here have been so kind as to restore Aldor and myself we can bring them back on our own." He looked up at Tulare, who was giving him a suspicious look. "We have our own transformational magics that are just as effective as anything from Madrane."		One of the mostly-human mages tiredly looked up and shook his head. He wore one of our travel cloaks to cover his nakedness. "No need, my boy," he said in a voice that was a near-bray. "Now that your friends here have been so kind as to restore Aldor and myself we can bring them back on our own." He looked up at Tulare, who was giving him a suspicious look. "We have our own transformational magics that are just as effective as anything from Madrane."

JonBuck: Author's note removed. Chapters look good.

2007-09-18T06:13:43Z

Author's note removed. Chapters look good.

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	{{author's note\|This is a very long story, but there are no breaks indicated in the narrative. Readers are welcome to insert separator dingbats and headers from the [[Help:Templates\|Templates]] page.}}
	~~{{editing requested}}~~
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Bryan: adding chapter breaks, hopefully in good places and with good titles. Also changing double-dashes to em dashes.

2007-09-18T04:25:59Z

adding chapter breaks, hopefully in good places and with good titles. Also changing double-dashes to em dashes.

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JonBuck: Added category.

2007-09-09T03:59:01Z

Added category.

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	As we were welcomed with open arms, and open hearts.		As we were welcomed with open arms, and open hearts.

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JonBuck at 20:46, 3 September 2007

2007-09-03T20:46:13Z

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			{{editing requested}}
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JonBuck: New page: {{byline|author=Jon Buck|user=JonBuck}} {{dropcap|"P}}ut your back into it lad! Ye canne let your opponent get the upper hand! And this time ''keep on your horse!"'' Easier said than d...

2007-09-03T20:39:50Z

New page: {{byline|author=Jon Buck|user=JonBuck}} {{dropcap|"P}}ut your back into it lad! Ye canne let your opponent get the upper hand! And this time ''keep on your horse!"'' Easier said than d...

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