User:Robotech Master/Holding Helena - Revision history

Robotech Master: Linking the next!

2019-10-31T18:44:25Z

Linking the next!

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Robotech Master: Category: story

2009-07-06T03:41:49Z

Category: story

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Robotech Master: Contracting the timeline a little (July to June)

2009-07-05T11:45:50Z

Contracting the timeline a little (July to June)

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	{{dropcap\|A}}t a hundred feet across and thirty feet deep, the enclosure would have been the envy of any zoo in the world. Divided by a long stream and dotted with large boulders, it was the kind of place where large cats would be at home during the hottest days of summer and the coldest days of winter. And if the weather turned inclement, or the cats just wanted some privacy, there was a cave at one end to provide cover. A railing around the rim provided a place for visitors to stand and watch, but there was also an enclosed observation platform at the west end.		{{dropcap\|A}}t a hundred feet across and thirty feet deep, the enclosure would have been the envy of any zoo in the world. Divided by a long stream and dotted with large boulders, it was the kind of place where large cats would be at home during the hottest days of summer and the coldest days of winter. And if the weather turned inclement, or the cats just wanted some privacy, there was a cave at one end to provide cover. A railing around the rim provided a place for visitors to stand and watch, but there was also an enclosed observation platform at the west end.

	Mostly open to the sky, the bowl also harbored a number of trees—some species native to North America and some native to the African Savana—that provided shade and places where cats that liked to climb could find respite. The shade was necessary at this time of year, when the summer sun blazed hot overhead and left little shade except that cast by the trees and the walls. Whether they were cougar, cheetah, or lion, the cats that had once been housed here would have been pleasantly comfortable on this hot ~~July~~ day.		Mostly open to the sky, the bowl also harbored a number of trees—some species native to North America and some native to the African Savana—that provided shade and places where cats that liked to climb could find respite. The shade was necessary at this time of year, when the summer sun blazed hot overhead and left little shade except that cast by the trees and the walls. Whether they were cougar, cheetah, or lion, the cats that had once been housed here would have been pleasantly comfortable on this hot June day.

	Today, however, the enclosure only had one occupant—feline, but not entirely. She was covered in tawny fur, and her head resembled that of a North American Cougar but with more expressiveness—especially around the eyes. Brown hair cascaded down her back to just past her shoulder blades, providing even more evidence of her nearly-human nature.		Today, however, the enclosure only had one occupant—feline, but not entirely. She was covered in tawny fur, and her head resembled that of a North American Cougar but with more expressiveness—especially around the eyes. Brown hair cascaded down her back to just past her shoulder blades, providing even more evidence of her nearly-human nature.

Robotech Master: pesky pronoun problem

2009-07-05T11:11:13Z

pesky pronoun problem

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	Lee waved a hand. "Oh, just go. Get that whole 'threshold' business done with. See me later."		Lee waved a hand. "Oh, just go. Get that whole 'threshold' business done with. See me later."

	Leo grinned. "You got it." And once again he swept his wife off ~~his~~ feet, and they tottered off up the path to the mansion's front door.		Leo grinned. "You got it." And once again he swept his wife off her feet, and they tottered off up the path to the mansion's front door.

	The others watched them go. "That is completely amazing," Dan said, sniffling. "Just…utterly and completely amazing. I'm so happy for them." The others slowly swivelled their heads to stare at him. "I mean, like, wow!" Dan added hastily. "Like, totally, like, awesome, and, like, bodacious! Whooo, gnarly!"		The others watched them go. "That is completely amazing," Dan said, sniffling. "Just…utterly and completely amazing. I'm so happy for them." The others slowly swivelled their heads to stare at him. "I mean, like, wow!" Dan added hastily. "Like, totally, like, awesome, and, like, bodacious! Whooo, gnarly!"

Robotech Master: pesky pronoun problem

2009-07-05T11:10:51Z

pesky pronoun problem

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	Lee waved a hand. "Oh, just go. Get that whole 'threshold' business done with. See me later."		Lee waved a hand. "Oh, just go. Get that whole 'threshold' business done with. See me later."

	Leo grinned. "You got it." And once again he swept ~~her~~ off his feet, and they tottered off up the path to the mansion's front door.		Leo grinned. "You got it." And once again he swept his wife off his feet, and they tottered off up the path to the mansion's front door.

	The others watched them go. "That is completely amazing," Dan said, sniffling. "Just…utterly and completely amazing. I'm so happy for them." The others slowly swivelled their heads to stare at him. "I mean, like, wow!" Dan added hastily. "Like, totally, like, awesome, and, like, bodacious! Whooo, gnarly!"		The others watched them go. "That is completely amazing," Dan said, sniffling. "Just…utterly and completely amazing. I'm so happy for them." The others slowly swivelled their heads to stare at him. "I mean, like, wow!" Dan added hastily. "Like, totally, like, awesome, and, like, bodacious! Whooo, gnarly!"

Robotech Master: gimlet!

2009-07-05T09:03:01Z

gimlet!

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	"You…you ''bitch''!" Lee growled. "How could you have done this to us?" She was standing over the bed with her claws unsheathed, glowering at the cougar-woman who was still lying there. All the other captives except Clarisse, Tim, and Jack (who were still down in the pen with the paramedics) had also gathered in the bedroom.		"You…you ''bitch''!" Lee growled. "How could you have done this to us?" She was standing over the bed with her claws unsheathed, glowering at the cougar-woman who was still lying there. All the other captives except Clarisse, Tim, and Jack (who were still down in the pen with the paramedics) had also gathered in the bedroom.

	"Um, technically, Lee, she—he—wasn't a 'bitch' yet when he…did…" Leo trailed off as Lee turned her gimlet eye on him.		"Um, technically, Lee, she—he—wasn't a 'bitch' yet when he…did…" Leo trailed off as Lee turned her [[wikipedia:gimlet (tool)\|gimlet]] eye on him.

	"…I'm sorry…I'm so sorry…I didn't…I wasn't…" the cougress whimpered. She'd rolled over with her head back, exposing her neck, in a gesture of submission. "…please don't hurt me…"		"…I'm sorry…I'm so sorry…I didn't…I wasn't…" the cougress whimpered. She'd rolled over with her head back, exposing her neck, in a gesture of submission. "…please don't hurt me…"

Robotech Master: another niggling word choice fix. you're never done editing a story.

2009-07-05T08:35:42Z

another niggling word choice fix. you're never done editing a story.

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	"So what? Does it all the time," Lee said, not looking up from the iPhone on which she was reading an e-book. "Nothing to get worked up over." She tapped the screen with a paw pad. "She damn well ought to be crying, what she put us through."		"So what? Does it all the time," Lee said, not looking up from the iPhone on which she was reading an e-book. "Nothing to get worked up over." She tapped the screen with a paw pad. "She damn well ought to be crying, what she put us through."

	"I've…been thinking," Leo said, drumming his fingers on the shelf where the binoculars rested. "About how we're treating her. We're supposed to be doing the same thing to her as he did to us, right?" The Changed had gotten ~~over~~ the weirdness of using two different pronouns in the same sentence about the same person. It was better than stumbling over them all the time.		"I've…been thinking," Leo said, drumming his fingers on the shelf where the binoculars rested. "About how we're treating her. We're supposed to be doing the same thing to her as he did to us, right?" The Changed had gotten used to the weirdness of using two different pronouns in the same sentence about the same person. It was better than stumbling over them all the time.

	"Yeah, so?" Lee said.		"Yeah, so?" Lee said.

Robotech Master: Kicking a "but"

2009-07-05T08:33:13Z

Kicking a "but"

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	Leo was on duty in the observation shed, along with Lee. They always kept someone there, "just in case she tries to escape." ~~But so~~ far, there had been no signs that Helena had even contemplated escape, but it had become something of a tradition—as well as a nice quiet place to read, or think, or clip your claws, or whatever. Nobody would disturb you if you were on "guard duty."		Leo was on duty in the observation shed, along with Lee. They always kept someone there, "just in case she tries to escape." So far, there had been no signs that Helena had even contemplated escape, but it had become something of a tradition—as well as a nice quiet place to read, or think, or clip your claws, or whatever. Nobody would disturb you if you were on "guard duty."

	Except possibly the other guard.		Except possibly the other guard.

Robotech Master: Creation and posting of story

2009-07-05T07:37:11Z

Creation and posting of story

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