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If you've read the [http://shifti.org/index.php?title=User:RandomDSdevel/Uprooted&oldid=18169 latest draft] of the [[User:RandomDSdevel/Uprooted|story]] to which this talk page belongs, then you may have noticed that it is still ''very'' rough, ''especially'' when it comes to how I've started it out.  The reason for this is simply that I can't seem to think of a way to make its prologue resonate with readers as more than just the means I've thought up to get Cameron Spryfletch, my main character, out of the ''near'' future and into the ''far'' future.  ''That's'' when all of the action is going to take place, and I can't seem to stop myself from wanting to get to that point in my story.  I'd like to work on coming up with a better introduction to my narrative, but I'm having trouble working out how I might do that.  <br />First of all, I'd like to develop Cameron some more as a person before he gets his ticket to 26<sup>th</sup>-century Earth, but there are only so many ways in which I could go about doing this without stretching the prologue out to an unbearable length.  Giving Cameron a lot more of a personality of his own early on would be a higher priority for me if I could fix the problem that I haven't really fleshed him out as a character yet.  I think that I ''might'' be able to get a better grasp of who Cameron ''is'' once I've  figured out how I want him to react to waking up in the future.  <br />Making it so that he knows more people before he gets sent on his way would probably help, too; but I don't want to involve too many individuals in Cameron's life before he goes into limbo.  Maybe Jennifer, who is currently Cameron's sister, could serve in her role as a supporting character by being one of Cameron's friends instead of being related to him, but I think of Jenna as being rather close to Cameron.  Though, on second thought, perhaps she could be his girlfriend instead?  That would give her an excuse to visit him in the hospital if Cameron died of something other than a gunshot wound.  I ''have'' [http://worldbuilding.stackexchange.com/questions/3979/medical-conditions-and-copying-rumplestiltskin considered] using some other, less-acute conditions such as some kind of cancer or motor-neuron disease as the cause of Cameron's death, but I disregarded them shortly before I started writing my first posted efforts in a decision that I am thinking about reversing.  <br />Anyway, that's what I've been contemplating with respect to [[Project 'Crash Course']]; if you have any comments on my current progress or suggestions about how events should unfold in it, then feel free to leave comments here.  You can obviously either reply on this progress report with a new post as if this one were the beginning of a discussion or ask a new question by starting a new thread in a new section of [[User talk:RandomDSdevel/Uprooted|this talk page]].  Either way, I'd ''greatly'' appreciate help in untangling the threads of my thoughts and discovering how exactly I want this part of my [[Project 'Crash Course'|tale]] to play out.  Hopefully, this chronicle won't be so epic that I can't relate it to all of you.
If you've read the [http://shifti.org/index.php?title=User:RandomDSdevel/Uprooted&oldid=18169 latest draft] of the [[User:RandomDSdevel/Uprooted|story]] to which this talk page belongs, then you may have noticed that it is still ''very'' rough, ''especially'' when it comes to how I've started it out.  The reason for this is simply that I can't seem to think of a way to make its prologue resonate with readers as more than just the means I've thought up to get Cameron Spryfletch, my main character, out of the ''near'' future and into the ''far'' future.  ''That's'' when all of the action is going to take place, and I can't seem to stop myself from wanting to get to that point in my story.  I'd like to work on coming up with a better introduction to my narrative, but I'm having trouble working out how I might do that.  <br />First of all, I'd like to develop Cameron some more as a person before he gets his ticket to 26<sup>th</sup>-century Earth, but there are only so many ways in which I could go about doing this without stretching the prologue out to an unbearable length.  Giving Cameron a lot more of a personality of his own early on would be a higher priority for me if I could fix the problem that I haven't really fleshed him out as a character yet.  I think that I ''might'' be able to get a better grasp of who Cameron ''is'' once I've  figured out how I want him to react to waking up in the future.  <br />Making it so that he knows more people before he gets sent on his way would probably help, too; but I don't want to involve too many individuals in Cameron's life before he goes into limbo.  Maybe Jennifer, who is currently Cameron's sister, could serve in her role as a supporting character by being one of Cameron's friends instead of being related to him, but I think of Jenna as being rather close to Cameron.  Though, on second thought, perhaps she could be his girlfriend instead?  That would give her an excuse to visit him in the hospital if Cameron died of something other than a gunshot wound.  I ''have'' [http://worldbuilding.stackexchange.com/questions/3979/medical-conditions-and-copying-rumplestiltskin considered] using some other, less-acute conditions such as some kind of cancer or motor-neuron disease as the cause of Cameron's death, but I disregarded them shortly before I started writing my first posted efforts in a decision that I am thinking about reversing.  <br />Anyway, that's what I've been contemplating with respect to [[Project 'Crash Course']]; if you have any comments on my current progress or suggestions about how events should unfold in it, then feel free to leave comments here.  You can obviously either reply on this progress report with a new post as if this one were the beginning of a discussion or ask a new question by starting a new thread in a new section of [[User talk:RandomDSdevel/Uprooted|this talk page]].  Either way, I'd ''greatly'' appreciate help in untangling the threads of my thoughts and discovering how exactly I want this part of my [[Project 'Crash Course'|tale]] to play out.  Hopefully, this chronicle won't be so epic that I can't relate it to all of you.
—&thinsp;[[User:RandomDSdevel|RandomDSdevel]] ([[User talk:RandomDSdevel|talk]]) 19:27, 29 November 2014 (CST)

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If you've read the latest draft of the story to which this talk page belongs, then you may have noticed that it is still very rough, especially when it comes to how I've started it out. The reason for this is simply that I can't seem to think of a way to make its prologue resonate with readers as more than just the means I've thought up to get Cameron Spryfletch, my main character, out of the near future and into the far future. That's when all of the action is going to take place, and I can't seem to stop myself from wanting to get to that point in my story. I'd like to work on coming up with a better introduction to my narrative, but I'm having trouble working out how I might do that.
First of all, I'd like to develop Cameron some more as a person before he gets his ticket to 26th-century Earth, but there are only so many ways in which I could go about doing this without stretching the prologue out to an unbearable length. Giving Cameron a lot more of a personality of his own early on would be a higher priority for me if I could fix the problem that I haven't really fleshed him out as a character yet. I think that I might be able to get a better grasp of who Cameron is once I've figured out how I want him to react to waking up in the future.
Making it so that he knows more people before he gets sent on his way would probably help, too; but I don't want to involve too many individuals in Cameron's life before he goes into limbo. Maybe Jennifer, who is currently Cameron's sister, could serve in her role as a supporting character by being one of Cameron's friends instead of being related to him, but I think of Jenna as being rather close to Cameron. Though, on second thought, perhaps she could be his girlfriend instead? That would give her an excuse to visit him in the hospital if Cameron died of something other than a gunshot wound. I have considered using some other, less-acute conditions such as some kind of cancer or motor-neuron disease as the cause of Cameron's death, but I disregarded them shortly before I started writing my first posted efforts in a decision that I am thinking about reversing.
Anyway, that's what I've been contemplating with respect to Project 'Crash Course'; if you have any comments on my current progress or suggestions about how events should unfold in it, then feel free to leave comments here. You can obviously either reply on this progress report with a new post as if this one were the beginning of a discussion or ask a new question by starting a new thread in a new section of this talk page. Either way, I'd greatly appreciate help in untangling the threads of my thoughts and discovering how exactly I want this part of my tale to play out. Hopefully, this chronicle won't be so epic that I can't relate it to all of you. — RandomDSdevel (talk) 19:27, 29 November 2014 (CST)