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Suggestions: Make this less like a clone of the buffy episode. Consider what adds to the story and what doesn't. Consider why one is mentally effect and the others are not. Consider why two ended up a humanoid animals and one didn't. Consider what makes sense and what doesn't. I felt very left in the dark about a lot of things here. And the relationship between Chaos and the store owner seems to flip flop on itself. What made them think that their enemy would EVEN leave town in those few hours? | Suggestions: Make this less like a clone of the buffy episode. Consider what adds to the story and what doesn't. Consider why one is mentally effect and the others are not. Consider why two ended up a humanoid animals and one didn't. Consider what makes sense and what doesn't. I felt very left in the dark about a lot of things here. And the relationship between Chaos and the store owner seems to flip flop on itself. What made them think that their enemy would EVEN leave town in those few hours? Consider these things and -think- about it. Remember the reader doesn't know what you know. Nor is likely to draw the same conclusions as you. Just some friendly advice. | ||
--ALex Warlorn 2008 10 27 | --ALex Warlorn 2008 10 27 | ||
Latest revision as of 13:17, 27 October 2008
I actually wrote a story with this theme myself called Wicked Roots. It's on my Costume TF Fan yahoo group.
http://groups.yahoo.com/group/CostumeTFFans/
Though I was aiming more for corruption and insidiousness than horror.
Alex Warlorn -- 2008 09 22
Can you add to Shifti?
I wonder if you add this story to shifti? I try yahoo but it would let me in b/c it thinks I'm underage when I'm not. So can you please add this stoy? P.S. I'm doing a story like this.
Gonna likely regret this. But done.
--Alex Warlorn 2008 09 25
Suggestions: Make this less like a clone of the buffy episode. Consider what adds to the story and what doesn't. Consider why one is mentally effect and the others are not. Consider why two ended up a humanoid animals and one didn't. Consider what makes sense and what doesn't. I felt very left in the dark about a lot of things here. And the relationship between Chaos and the store owner seems to flip flop on itself. What made them think that their enemy would EVEN leave town in those few hours? Consider these things and -think- about it. Remember the reader doesn't know what you know. Nor is likely to draw the same conclusions as you. Just some friendly advice.
--ALex Warlorn 2008 10 27