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Not doing a full In Which I Read, in part because I keep getting swept along and forgetting to make notes: sign of strong writing! But close to the end, you start using "Athena" all over the place, when I think you mean "Artemis". (Athena would be an owl, going by animal associations. But if groups (and non-Integrates) could earn Olympic title-names, I think the FreeRIDEr Four (Rhianna, Kaylee, Rochelle, and Uncia) would be the best fit: the mythological Athena is a goddess of knowledge, craftsmanship, and war.) Except for that one oddly widespread error, this is pretty much flawless to my eyes. --[[User:Proginoskes|Proginoskes]] ([[User talk:Proginoskes|talk]]) 23:54, 24 April 2013 (UTC) | Not doing a full In Which I Read, in part because I keep getting swept along and forgetting to make notes: sign of strong writing! But close to the end, you start using "Athena" all over the place, when I think you mean "Artemis". (Athena would be an owl, going by animal associations. But if groups (and non-Integrates) could earn Olympic title-names, I think the FreeRIDEr Four (Rhianna, Kaylee, Rochelle, and Uncia) would be the best fit: the mythological Athena is a goddess of knowledge, craftsmanship, and war.) Except for that one oddly widespread error, this is pretty much flawless to my eyes. --[[User:Proginoskes|Proginoskes]] ([[User talk:Proginoskes|talk]]) 23:54, 24 April 2013 (UTC) | ||
:Thank you very much! I had a lot of fun writing this one and I'm proud of how it turned out. I'll go find those errors. --[[User:JonBuck|Buck]] ([[User talk:JonBuck|talk]]) 19:39, 25 April 2013 (UTC) | |||
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Nitpicking
Not doing a full In Which I Read, in part because I keep getting swept along and forgetting to make notes: sign of strong writing! But close to the end, you start using "Athena" all over the place, when I think you mean "Artemis". (Athena would be an owl, going by animal associations. But if groups (and non-Integrates) could earn Olympic title-names, I think the FreeRIDEr Four (Rhianna, Kaylee, Rochelle, and Uncia) would be the best fit: the mythological Athena is a goddess of knowledge, craftsmanship, and war.) Except for that one oddly widespread error, this is pretty much flawless to my eyes. --Proginoskes (talk) 23:54, 24 April 2013 (UTC)