User talk:JonBuck/Fly With Me

Nitpicking

Not doing a full In Which I Read, in part because I keep getting swept along and forgetting to make notes: sign of strong writing! But close to the end, you start using "Athena" all over the place, when I think you mean "Artemis". (Athena would be an owl, going by animal associations. But if groups (and non-Integrates) could earn Olympic title-names, I think the FreeRIDEr Four (Rhianna, Kaylee, Rochelle, and Uncia) would be the best fit: the mythological Athena is a goddess of knowledge, craftsmanship, and war.) Except for that one oddly widespread error, this is pretty much flawless to my eyes. --Proginoskes (talk) 23:54, 24 April 2013 (UTC)

Thank you very much! I had a lot of fun writing this one and I'm proud of how it turned out. I'll go find those errors. --Buck (talk) 19:39, 25 April 2013 (UTC)