User talk:Robotech Master/Deserted

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First Comment!

Hey, I just finished reading this story, and Merging Traffic. I just want to say I love the new setting, and I really enjoyed both stories. I do have one small critique, though. In this story it seemed a little bit unnatural that Zane and Terry were talking about staying together forever so soon after they first met. I guess it seemed a little bit like talking about getting married halfway through the first date. :) I think Terry especially, because of his past, and because of how bitter and set against having a human partner he seems to be at first, could have more internal conflict about it, and take longer to come around. Anyway, this is only my opinion, and I'm only mentioning it to give you another perspective. I really did enjoy the story. --Antimatter (talk) 06:38, 23 July 2012 (UTC)

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