User talk:Robotech Master/Assault Batteries

Ooohhh maannn! Why do these stories always end on these things called Cliffs?  :D

I'm loving these stories Robotech, Jon and Jetfire. (Though I could do without the hanging at the end of the chapters. hehe.) VoyseyS (talk) 19:14, 18 September 2012 (UTC)

Notes on the DC

“I have been monitoring our ten ‘Fortunatos’ as closely as I might since the two cured RIDEs have returned to the camp, but I have not seen any unusual movements near them, nor detected unusual network traffic. Of course, whisker laser transmissions are very hard to detect.”

Wouldn't the infected RIDEs be the 'Montressors,' and their trapped humans the 'Fortunatos?'

The Dream Chaser had fore and aft retractable pulse cannons and two dozen of Kaylee’s favored micro-missiles in underwing FAST paks—the weapons were temporary, at least.

In previous chapters it was "Dreamchaser," which I think works a little better. (Or at least it matches with Starmaster.) There are a few more instances of "Dream Chaser" in this chapter also.

“This is going to be tough. If they run, I’m a little too big to chase,

"Too big to give chase" would be clearer.

The problem with obvious places were rather self-evident, but it was just like her uncle. The problem was that if there was another Integrate aboard they could have done any number of things if they found the DIN.

Singular/plural disagreement in the first sentence. Also, two sentences in a row starting with "The problem" is a little awkward.

To her knowledge neither he nor his followers had ever killed another Intie.

Quinoa at least knows Fritz killed Paulie, if I remember correctly.

The sphinx started hyper-saturating her body with oxygen, topping off her batteries.

Inties can convert oxygen to electrical power? If so, why couldn't she have done that in the first place to get above 3% charge? (I totally could have missed something here.)

For convenience, the network had been arranged to have a 1:1 topology between the virtual and real worlds, which meant that the DINS in here would be in exactly the same places as outside.

DINs.

Rochelle reached out with a flood of DIN encrypted network probes masked as something from another Integrated.

Integrate.

--Antimatter (talk) 19:59, 29 February 2016 (CST)